View Full Version : It was late

08-29-2007, 03:01 AM
i apologise in advance if this is too long. it is 2 1/2 MS Word pages long

It was late
I was staggering home
From the pub
Or club
Or whatever.
A light flickered
On, off, on, off.
It was a sign of neon
Under which
I had found my goddess.
Not a street walker
Just a patron
Like me
Out for a good night
Or a good time.
I had my beer goggles on
And my inhibitions were lost
So I wandered over
And asked
‘Do you need a lift home?’
‘Yes,’ she replied.
‘And where may you place be?’
I was taken aback
But inside I was smiling
‘Just down this way.’
As we walked to my place
I couldn’t keep my eyes off her
Her shapely form
Her beautiful breasts
Her perfect hips
Her beautiful face.
I opened my door
But she knew what she wanted
The door closed
And she was on me
Kissing me
Stripping me of the clothes I wore.
The alcohol flowed
Coursing through our veins
Fuelling our lust
Our desire.
I led her to my room
And there we fondled
And caressed
Our bodies giving into urges
Our primal instinct.
My tongue lapped
At her beautiful lips
Like a flower
Dripping her nectar
The taste was divine.
It was then turn for her other lips
Her tongue
Caressing mine
As we joined at the hips
And I filled her inside
Her touch like velvet
Demanding my hardness,
As solid as a rock,
Not leaving he grip.
Her breasts heaved
As she rode me
Slow at first
Enjoying the feeling
Then harder
And faster
As the orgasm built inside her.
I held her tight
Not wanting this to end
That the alcohol had dulled my senses
But it hadn’t affected hers
I felt her cum
But I was not ready
Not to end this so soon
And neither was she.
She continued
As hard
And fast
And I felt her
All over my hardness
Luring the cum out of me
I could feel it
Rising in her
Rising in me
The alcohol wearing off
Unable to hold back
Together we came
I just held her
Not wanting to leave her
Her not wanting to leave me
We collapsed
The next morning
I awoke
And wonder
What happened last night.
My head now clear
I looked over
And saw last night’s lover.
Some may say
She was plain
A little chubby
But to me
She was my goddess
And I loved her so much

And you know what
The only time she went home
Was to get her gear

08-29-2007, 03:23 AM
Not so long at all. Thanks for a nice contribution.

08-29-2007, 03:41 AM
Thanks for the addition...not to long at all

08-29-2007, 07:38 AM
Great stuff thanks

08-29-2007, 07:49 AM
thanks. any advice though, cause i know it could have been better

08-29-2007, 07:55 AM
stanza's that's all I could see...make is flow smoother

08-29-2007, 08:30 AM
yeah i have to work on that. was trying to go for a narative feel. guess i have been watching too much sin city

08-29-2007, 09:03 PM
Great poem, loved every word of it.