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daddy spanks
12-03-2008, 08:09 PM
Ryan stood beforew the group of men each one was her dads age, she waited for the command from her controler, at last she heard him say " remove all your clothes " she did so and now stood naked. how did this start? she was only 16yrs old and trusted most everyone. It was her teacher Mr. James who first gave her a drink with an added drug one that would make her obey. she was told that what she did she would remember but could not tell anyone it was only for her and her master. she was told to strip and made to pose for pics the kind that men enjoyed. after still naked she was brought out of her trance naked and no clothes in sight she blushed and was confused. he the told her to dress and leave but at his words she would again be his slave

12-04-2008, 06:12 AM
Short and to the point, maybe could do with padding ouy by telling the reader how it came about the mr james selected Ryan or even a detailed description of Ryan.

Has the great potemtial to be not just one good stroy but a great series.